I agree 99.35% with Kirbyfighter12...
Although I have never made a song (I admit it, I suck at it), I have a huge criticism point. I wouldn't be considered a "Nice Guy" when it comes to music. What can be improved with the song:
Every song ha the main melody, the harmony, and those small little notes (calling them background noises) that nobody pays attention to. If you leave those notes out, the song sounds weird. You need to put every note into every song before submitting it.
You shouldn't mess around with the instruments (Or whatever they are called, again, I suck at it) too much. You should make the instruments sound close.
The main melody has to be heard. You can't just put it in as a background noise. This makes the song unrecognizable, degrading the quality.
The idea is good, but you have to make the pieces flow together; as if they belong together.
Even I was thinking about this (the fusion of music, but like I said, I SUCK at it), but this isn't the style I had in mind. Try to keep at it, though.